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| Answer
to Task 2: Choosing a conclusion and writing a paragraph to support
that conclusion |
There are, of course, a number of ways you could order the
arguments in your answer. You are correct if you:
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have placed the arguments that oppose your main
conclusion in the first half of your paragraph
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b.
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have used problematising phrases to mark the
opposing statements as debatable and possibly
untrue
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c.
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have used a contrasting connective, such as
"However", to mark where you are shifting from
arguments that oppose your main conclusion to
arguments that support your main conclusion
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d.
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have used listing connectives, such as
"Moreover", "Furthermore", and "In addition" to
list the arguments that support your main
conclusion
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Below are possible paragraphs for each of the two main
conclusions:
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conclusion 1:
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Smoking rooms should be set up in
workplaces to allow people to smoke indoors.
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It has been argued
that setting aside rooms for smokers
does not mean that the harmful effects of smoking
are limited to smokers alone (Rugby, 1989).
This position contends
that most public buildings are air
conditioned and this means that any harmful tobacco
smoke that is produced in one room will spread to
other rooms through the air conditioning system.
It is also claimed
that because we rightfully have a
universal health insurance system in this country,
the costs of treating tobacco-related illnesses are
shared by all the community, smokers and
non-smokers alike. These illnesses,
so this argument
goes, create a terrible and expensive
burden on our health system.
It is maintained
that they increase the overall cost of
medical services and use up scarce medical
resources. However, as
Jane Black, the spokesperson for Smokers for a
Democratic Society, explains forbidding
smokers from pursuing their habit in public places
is an infringement of their democratic rights and
is discriminatory.(The Age 18.6.93).
Moreover,
banning smoking in all public places is another
example of the way the government uses health and
safety issues as a cover for introducing
increasingly tight control over people's lives.
Furthermore,
public buildings are places where all members of
the community should have equal access.
In addition,
people should be free to do what they like so long
as it does not harm other citizens.
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conclusion 2:
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Smoking rooms should not be set up in
workplaces to allow people to smoke indoors.
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Jane Black, the
spokesperson for Smokers for a Democratic Society,
asserts that forbidding smokers from
pursuing their habit in public places is an
infringement of their democratic rights and is
discriminatory (The Age 18.6.93).
This position goes on to
argue that banning smoking in all public
places is another example of the way the government
uses health and safety issues as a cover for
introducing increasingly tight control over
people's lives. Public buildings,
so this argument
goes, are places where all members of
the community should have equal access.
It is claimed
that people should be free to do what
they like so long as it does not harm other
citizens. However, as
Rugby (1989) states, setting aside rooms
for smokers does not mean that the harmful effects
of smoking are limited to smokers alone. Public
buildings are air conditioned and this means that
any harmful tobacco smoke that is produced in one
room will spread to other rooms through the air
conditioning system.
Moreover,
because we rightfully have a universal health
insurance system in this country, the costs of
treating tobacco-related illnesses are shared by
all the community, smokers and non-smokers alike.
These illnesses create a terrible and expensive
burden on our health system. They increase the
overall cost of medical services and use up scarce
medical resources.
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Note: Not many listing
connectives were used in the second half of the conclusion 2 text
because there are only two arguments but each argument is made up
of more than one sentence - listing connectives are used for listing
arguments, not for
listing sentences.
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